Question

人類只有一個地球。根據提示，以“Saving the Earth”為題，寫一篇80詞左右的短文。
提示: 1.如何保護環境已成為世界最大難題之一；
2.各種污染破壞環境，損害健康；
3.不要亂倒垃圾，亂排廢水；4.我們應該保護環境，使我們的家園更加美麗。
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Answer 1

Saving the Earth
How to protect the environment has become one of the biggest problems in the world. There are many kinds of pollutions around us, such as air pollution, noise pollution, water pollution and light pollution. We can find that rubbish not only pollutes our environment but also harms people’s health. So we should not throw rubbish everywhere. Some factories pour waste water into the rivers and the lakes. The behavior of these factories will pollute the water, and sometimes it can kill the fish living in them.
We have only one earth. We must keep our environment clean and tidy. We must try our best to protect her, and make our home more beautiful.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文,動筆前首先要認真審題,弄清題意。然后根據主題組織材料，確定寫作內容。寫作中，應注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內容利用上；結合材料內容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般現在時態進行敘述。語言的表述應該符合語法的結構，造句應該符合英語的表達習慣。適當使用連詞，做到上下文聯系緊密，符合邏輯關系。
【亮點說明】這篇短文包含了所有要點，能圍繞內容要點適當發揮，內容具體、豐富。應用了較豐富的語言結構和詞匯，用詞準確、句子通順、行文連貫、表達清楚，具有較強的語言運用能力。層次清晰，語言地道，主題鮮明，內容翔實，格式正確，結構緊湊。使用了一些比較好的字句。比如：one of the biggest problems in the world；such as比如；not only……but also……；We must try our best to……等。學習中注意總結,牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當引用, 讓文章更出彩。