Question

今年?yáng)|臺(tái)正在申報(bào)全國(guó)文明城市，你們學(xué)校的English Club正在舉辦以“創(chuàng)建文明城市，爭(zhēng)做文明市民”為主題的征文活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下的內(nèi)容提示及要求寫一篇應(yīng)征稿。
內(nèi)容提示： ◆ 尊敬師長(zhǎng)，明禮誠(chéng)信    ◆友善待人，樂(lè)于助人
◆ 遵守交規(guī)，不闖紅燈    ◆保護(hù)環(huán)境
◆ 你的觀點(diǎn)
寫作要求：
1. 文章必須包含所提供的主要信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名；
3. 詞數(shù)：90詞左右（開頭和結(jié)尾已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。
參考詞匯：respect (vt.尊敬), obey traffic rules遵守交規(guī)
Help to Make Dongtai a Civilized City
We all know that Dongtai is applying for the national civilized city. As students, what should we do ? _____________________________________________________________
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Dongtai is our hometown. Let's try our best to make it a civilized city.

Answer 1

Help to Make Dongtai a Civilized City
We all know that Dongtai is applying for the national civilized city. As students, what should we do ? We must respect our teachers, parents and the old. We should also be polite and honest. Besides, we should help those who are in need and be friendly to the people around us. It is important for us obey traffic rules, too.When crossing the streets, we should walk on the zebra crossing. We mustn’t go across the street when the traffic lights are red.What’s more, we should protect the environment. For example，we mustn't step on the grass or pick flowers. We mustn’t drop litter carelessly.
Dongtai is our hometown.Let's try our best to make it a civilized city.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少。如:that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句We all know that……；強(qiáng)調(diào)句式It is adj for sb to do sth，做某事對(duì)某人來(lái)說(shuō)怎么樣等。副詞Besides，及短語(yǔ)What’s more, 更重要的是；For example例如；try one’s best 等的使用是本文看起來(lái)更加條理清楚，符合邏輯關(guān)系。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用, 讓文章更出彩。